2 Poems created by me - Please give comments
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Share wif you all guys about the little poem i created during my "lonely" nitez by the :-
1)River Bay
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River Bay Sensation
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Colorful Lightings by the bay,
Shinning glister fully on the river way
Gentle wind cooling onto our naked face,
Blowing away every little bits of our troubled trace
Sitting under the 3-storey human Lego,
Drowning our cooling orange with sips of ego
Looking at the gentle moving wave,
Whispering sounds of comfort into our audio caves
Shinning Light hanging up high in the nature blue,
Smiling sweetly onto the gentle water queue
Oh! Such a lovely night,
Completely captured into the heart of two gals sight!
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2) Beach Sensation
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Lay the white fluffy cat on the greyish way
Sleeping n yawning lazily under the man-made clay.
Gentle wind blowing onto my naked face
Inviting the dancing of my black strands of lace.
Hearing the gentle splashings of the bluey waves
Echoing ripples of love into my cardio caves.
Oh!What a lovely sunny sight
Brightening up my inner night.
Dreaming of my dashing Knight
Wondering when will he come to my Light! -
Not bad...
Jus that u don't really have to try too hard to make the verses rhyme.... i think good rhythm is more important for a nice poem. -
Another one just created..
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FROG PORRIDGE SENSATION
By the roadside here we look,
Black patches flooded the crowded red tiny tools
Sniffing the aroma taste of the fragrance air,
Hungering us with eager tastes of the clay pot fair
Dipping the chopsticks into the black sauce with our eagerness,
Drowning our mouth with its tenderness
Well-known for its pleasant service and fast delivery,
Its name echoed within the vicinity
The thoughts was always put to sight
Satisfying one with smiles and delight
Oh! What a delicious delicacy!
That makes one momentarily absorb into his own stage of immortality
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Try Something Else Some Other Time
It has been a nice one!
Xiong Di Di -
i like de titles of ur poems
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Y eh?Originally posted by gUms:i like de titles of ur poems
So nice of my titles meh..
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Beastly Moans
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Moomoo ...meow meow meow
Neighneigh ...bow wow wow
BaaBaa... oinkoinkoink
Roarroar... chirpchirpchirp.
(perhaps that was how evolution was brought about?)
OK sorry i'll never post such a stupid poem again!!